April 6 Chinese Food Excursion
Chinese Food Excursion I’m out the door and it’s still February in April, a ghost-town Saturday night. I marvel at Richard, speeding down the sidewalk, his white cane a vigorous sweep. He...
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Interesting what you noticed on your trip to pick up carryout. I especially like the last line.
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Another telephone pole has cracked and lists. a strangely lovely line. And I like that Richard appears, and what he won't see... Pople don't usually look into faces. I do, sometimes. i like this poem.
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Yes, an interesting detailed excursion. I liked Richard and yes the servings always seem to weigh so much.
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Only the fourth makes eye-contact; “Hello, I’m a human too,” he signs with a dear re-arrangemen of face. typo there, but that's not why I quote it. I sometimes think of smiling at strangers...
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A great line: My nose arrives at the restaurant before I do.
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Oh, I like this one a lot, Johanna! All those wonderful details. It feels so real. We can see the scene, smell the food. And it has a tenderness to it. I like: "it’s still February in April," and I...
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Lovely. Such close attention with all the senses. Makes me deeply desire Chinese food. Agree that this is a prize line: Another telephone pole has cracked and lists. Lists is one of those words you...
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I always thought Pad Thai was, well - Thai, but I guess it has some Chinese origins? Yes, will have to go out now and get some fixin's! mm. the "benevolence" of coconut and lemon grass.
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Thanks, Everyone! Toni, I appreciate the suggestions & will certainly change most of them. I'm going to keep both dears, though because I don't mind the repetition this time and they were both so...
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wow. nice commentary. Dear with a Chinese accent. you know, "I'm a human too", is going to take on even more tones, in the not too distant future. it already does.
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I understand about the second dear. But it's so much more powerful when you show us, instead of telling us it was dear. And your poem's working! Whatever you decide, I like it.
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Great description of a night out - I like to do this as well, take myself out for dinner. One of my favourite lines isMy nose arrives at the restaurant before I do.But I enjoyed all of it
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You carried us all along with you on this trek. I agree with all that's already been said. Now where are those cartons? I'm hungry!
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